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A sudden bitter wind gusted through the otherwise silent and empty lands, whipping at Caravi's clothing as he stood on the edge of the shore, the ocean's waves crashing at the toes of his boots. A storm grew behind him, he knew, at the base of the mountains, but he ignored that particular menace in exchange for the greater one that emanated from the depths of his soul.

"I bled for each and every one of you!" he exclaimed out of the absolute silence that he had maintained for nearly a week. "I bled, and would have died for you if there could have been any other way." He paused, his heart suddenly pounding, sending the rage through the rest of his body. "If that wasn't enough, I carry the weight of that cursed choice. There is not a single day that I wake up and hate myself for it. Not a single cursed day that passes when I don't have to force myself to get up and go on!" Bitter and utterly out of control, the rage and pain poured out, leaving a gaping hole in their place. "How dare you presume that none of this means a thing to me!" Caravi shouted, just about screaming, his voice hoarse. "How dare you ask me if it was worth it!"
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A writing prompt from: :devlookinfortherightart: and suggested by S. from writing group.
For: 2/23/2011
#230 It was worth it
Influences: Ahm... the usual. Like the last one, this has room and plans for improvement.
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=mippins Mar 20, 2011  Student Writer
Quite a bit of emotion in this. I like it. :)
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~openmeadow Mar 20, 2011  Student Writer
The emotion just about gurgled out of the words as I wrote them... I had a bit of fun with it :)
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=mippins Mar 20, 2011  Student Writer
Sounds like it!
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~Lindenare Feb 25, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Nice! I like all the emotion in here. (Now I'm wondering why this seems like something I might write. I guess we have similar ways of torturing characters.)
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~openmeadow Feb 25, 2011  Student Writer
Glad you liked it! My first thought when finished writing this was 'ouch' just because I put him through so much, yet again.

You know... that's a good point. Mayhaps we do!
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